Autumn Equinox

Inspired by Rick Daddario's 30 Days of Haiga - 

September 21th prompt: autumn/spring beginnings

     I posted the original version of this haiga on Free Haiga to ask for feedback. I think I caused a little stir as there were some conflicting opinions. To avoid anymore confusion, I changed the last line.

original version:

autumn equinox

he carves a watermelon

scarecrow

new version:

autumn equinox

he carves a watermelon

into a scarecrow

     Now, this is a lot better. It doesn't sound like a three-line haiku. Also, without forcing it, it's 5/7/5. ;-)


Update: September 24, 2012
Gabi Geve added this haiga on World Kigo Database.

Orange Leaves

orange leaves

the fragrance

of pumpkin pie

Asahi Haikuist Network (October 21, 2011)